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Band 6

The bar chart below shows the hour per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007

The bar chart illustrates key information about the
hours
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 that young people spent in several activities per week. The units are measured in
hours
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.
Overall
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, it is clear
form
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from
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 the graph that watching television is the most popular for
the
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apply
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all age
catagories
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categories
,
wheras
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whereas
 the opposite with bowling
they
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, they
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 are not interested that much. In terms of the lowest
one
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, one
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 is 2002 kids who only spent a tiny
friction
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fraction
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 in bowling.
for
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For
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 2003
kids
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kids,
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 the second
high
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highest
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hours
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 after
watcing televisin
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watching television
 is watching DVDs . Now
2004
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2004,
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 kids have time
in going
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to go
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 to pubs
with
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for
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 just
above
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over
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 10
hours
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.
According to
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 what is shown, the years
from
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apply
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2005, 2006, and 2007
they
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apply
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are
spening
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spending
 a lot of
hours
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 than the rest of the others.
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In 2007
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2007
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2007,
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 teenagers
spend
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spent
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 almost 37.5
hours
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to
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apply
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watching television. The same thing with
2006
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2006,
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 with approximately 36
hours
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 in watching television.
For
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In
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2005
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2005,
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 they spent some time watching DVDs
nearly
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, nearly
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 16
hours
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.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trends
  • compare and contrast
  • increase/decrease
  • time allocation
  • shifts in popularity
  • significant changes
  • cultural factors
  • technological advancements
  • social dynamics
  • implications
  • physical/mental health
  • social development
  • leisure activities
  • recreational
  • sedentary
  • engagement
  • interaction
  • steadily
  • dramatically
  • marginally
  • consistently
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