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The pie charts below show the percentage of electricity production by fuel source in France in 1990 and 2010.

The pie chart provides the percentage of electricity production by
fuel
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source
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 in France from 1990 to 2010.
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, the main feature is nuclear
power
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 becoming the major
fuel
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source
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 in electricity production. In 1990
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years
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, the percentage of nuclear
power
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 was 17% to 67% in 2010
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years
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. It is relatively upward in the pattern of
fuel
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source
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.
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 50% in
using
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the use of
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 nuclear
power
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.
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, Natural gas
decreases
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decreased
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 24% from 1990 to 2010. In 1990, natural
power
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 was the top three
fuel
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 sources, but it downward 24% after 20
years
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. In 2010, natural
power
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 only
distribute
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4%
in
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of
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current
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the current
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fuel
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source
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.
Moreover
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,
22
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the 22
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% Oil in
fuel
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source
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 from 1990 decreased to 13% in 2010. It was
a
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slightly downward after 20
years
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, that
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that
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with
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 9 percentages. In conclusion, three main features that nuclear
power
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, natural gas and oil through 20
years
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 change and
current
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the current
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fuel
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source
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 is nuclear
power
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being
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, being
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 the majority
fuel
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fuel, source, power, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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