‘Children do not respect their parents as much as they did in the past. This behaviour is now having a negative impact on society.’ Discuss. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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the number
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of rude children
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has risen
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dramatically. I believe that it’s
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small segment of society.
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essay will discuss the topic with relevant examples before reaching a conclusion.
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with, most minors
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are selfish
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. Generally, parents give
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many
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much
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attention so
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the child
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become
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spoiled.
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,
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lands
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leads
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to negative effects ,
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as indifference and careless behaviour . Mothers and Fathers felt
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disrespected
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due to
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this
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fact , especially when
child
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the child
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does not listen to them.
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, if we look from another’s side , youngsters mostly do not harm
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they often fail to consider the feelings of others. To add on , relatives sometimes may be
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overprotecting
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.
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not
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only about care but
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hyper
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custody. As a
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teenager,
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I can understand my peers. Certainly, it has lots of differences from past decades. I can assume, parents were more strict and demanding
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with these days. In my opinion,
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depends on the person . Every decade had
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a vitreous
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experience.
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is not
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a problem
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, it’s changes. They are now raising uncultured children who think they know life better than their elders. In conclusion,
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teenagers
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attitude
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attitudes
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changed
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have changed
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it
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, it
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is not
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significant
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for society. World changing and it is development.In my point of view, minors can be
over aggressive
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over-aggressive
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but
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, but
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this
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depends on culture ,
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and relatives.

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task
Plan what you want to say. Start with a clear view on the topic and say it in one line in the intro. Then add 2 or 3 simple ideas with reasons.
coherence
Make each paragraph have one main idea. Start with a topic sentence and use simple links to join ideas.
grammar
Use simple grammar and check spelling. Short, clear sentences are better than long, mixed ones.
content
Give one or two easy examples from life or news to show each idea.
content
The writer tries to talk about both sides of the issue.
concept
The issue of change over time is noted.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • individualism
  • traditional values
  • authority
  • communication dynamics
  • pervasive
  • social networks
  • critical thinking
  • authoritarian
  • economic stressors
  • power structures
  • juvenile delinquency
  • family units
  • community cohesion
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