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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your own opionion.

In recent years, the
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visitors
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visitors'
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behaviour
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have
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has
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 attracted considerable attention and
became
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 a subject
ongoing
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of ongoing
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 debate.
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while
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 some
poeple
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people
 argue that
visitor
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visitors
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 should follow local
customs
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, others
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contend
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 that
host
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the host
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country
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welcome
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welcomes
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 the different cultures.
This
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prespectives
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perspectives
 before
present
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 my own view, which is
the
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that the
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 visitor must
respict
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respect
 and follow local
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people
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people's
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behaviour
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. One compelling argument in favour of following local
customs
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behaviour
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and behaviour
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 is that traditional rules must be followed.
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largely
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 because any breakdown of these rules may be
consider
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considered
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 as
unrespective
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irresponsible
behaviour
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.
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, in saudia arabia,
people
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 must respect the praying area
which
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, which
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 means they will be calm and nice in
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those areas
.
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, it
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depends
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 on the culture of local
people
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but
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, but
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 to be
invoving
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involved
 in the
comunity
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community
need
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needs
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tofollow
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to follow
 the local
customs
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 and
behaviour
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.
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,
thoes
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those
 who support the
country
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people
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 should welcome the different cultures, argue that
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approach
more
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is more
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primary
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primarily
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due to
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 that
visitors
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 are
consider
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considered
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 as
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a country
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country
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country's
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economy
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 mothed. From
this
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prespective
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perspective
, the local
people
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 can
inhance
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enhance
this
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 economy by being friendly
visitors
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apply
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customs
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.
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, in
dubai
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Dubai
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, there
is
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are
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 a million
of
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visitors
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yearly
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yearly,
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 many of them
are repeating
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repeat
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 their
viste
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visit
 many times because
the
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of the
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 local
people
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.
Consequentlly
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Consequently
, governments around the world pay
a tention
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attention
 to
visiters
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visitors
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 as
importaant
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important
 to local
people
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. In conclusion,
although
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bothe
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both
 viewpoints present valid arguments regarding
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visitors
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visitors'
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behaviour
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. I
firmely
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firmly
 believe that
the
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apply
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visiters
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visitors
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 should
be
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apply
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respect the
custemes
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customs
 of
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country
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the country
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 because
people
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 must read and pay attention to
customs
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 before
travilling
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travelling
 there.

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structure
Plan your essay before you write. State your view in the first paragraph and repeat it in the end.
organization
Use two clear parts for the two views and then a short part that shows your own view.
grammar
Use simple grammar and fix small errors. Check words like visitor(s), customs, behaviour, economy.
content
Give one or two real and clear examples that fit the point you make.
content
You try to discuss both sides of the topic.
content
You give some real life places as examples.
structure
You end with a clear view.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster mutual understanding
  • reverence
  • cultural clashes
  • peaceful coexistence
  • cultural immersion
  • authentic experience
  • cultural identity
  • enrich
  • pluralistic society
  • cultural exchange
  • tolerance
  • flexibility
  • international relations
  • global understanding
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