Local Council is planning to improve public transport services. What do you think could be improved in our local Council services. Write tu your friend who is also uses

Hi Monica, I hope you’re doing well. I recently received an email from the Local Council, and it made me really happy because they asked for my opinion. I’m planning to suggest that they provide cleaner and more comfortable buses, as
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would create a healthier environment for everyone. It would
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free tickets for students for one day. What do you think could be improved in our local council? I would love to hear your ideas. Lots of love, Maftuna Narziyeva

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Add more ideas and details to show help; for example, talk about how buses can be clean and safe, and how the changes could be paid for.
coherence
Use a simple path of ideas. Put one idea at the start, then a second, and finish with a note to ask for more thoughts.
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Link words can help flow: use 'first', 'next', 'also', 'however' to show move from one idea to the next.
structure
Be sure to end with a clear closing sentence that asks for more ideas or thanks the friend.
tone
Friendly tone and clear aim to ask for ideas
content
Gives practical ideas (cleaner buses, free tickets)
Fully explain your ideas

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