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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

You are a member of a local gym. Recently, the equipment has been poorly maintained and the changing rooms are not clean. You have spoken to the staff, but nothing has changed. Write a letter to the manager of the gym. In your letter: Explain the situation and your membership details. Complain about the condition of the gym. State what you want the manager to do.

Dear Sir/Madam I am writing
this
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 letter to express my strong dissatisfaction with all the facilities that
provided
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are provided
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 by your local gym that I joined
2nd
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on 2nd
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Februry
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February
, 2026. I was assured when I
sign-up
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signed up
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 for
premium
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a premium
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 membership that the
aequipments
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equipment
 would be up-to-date and high
standred
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standard
 of hygiene.
However
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,
this
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 has not been in case.
many
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Many
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trademills
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treadmills
 are broken
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also
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, also
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 the changing rooms
have
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apply
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lack
of
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apply
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maintaince
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maintenance
. To make
matter
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matters
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 worse, I have already
attempt
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attempted
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 to resolve
this
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 by
contancting
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contacting
 staff and trainer, but
i
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I
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 have yet to
recieve
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receive
 a response.
This
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 has caused me significant inconvenience because I am going
take
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to take
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a
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apply
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part in body
building
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bodybuilding
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 competition next year in 2027 and I need
a
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apply
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plenty of training and practice so
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I will
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will
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can
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 win. At present, I feel that
you
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your
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 service is not the professional
standred
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standard
 I expected.
under
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Under
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 the circumstances, I would like to request either
immidiate
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immediate
 replacement or a full refund of my payment that I have already paid. I have
look
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looked
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 forward fro your prompt response regarding
this
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 matter. Your Faithfully Davinder Kaur

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content
Your letter has a clear goal and says what you want, but add more facts like your member number and the dates you spoke to staff.
structure
Break the writing into three parts: intro, problem, and what you want. Use one main idea in each paragraph.
language
Fix big errors: spelling and grammar. For example, 'treadmills' not 'trademills', 'your' not 'you', 'maintenance'.
style
End with a polite note and proper sign off, like 'Yours faithfully,' and your name.
content
The letter states what action you want (replacement or refund).
relevance
It mentions your member details and the time you joined.
style
The tone is formal most of the time.
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