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Band 4

Some people believe that unpaid community activity service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example, working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood, or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Presently, when the world
become
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becomes
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a peace
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peaceful
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,
people
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 tend to
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get involve
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involve
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involved
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 in certain activities
such
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 as
non profit
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non-profit
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organization
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organisation
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 activity aiming
create
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to create
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 a broad
impact
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to
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on
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 its
community
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for
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, for
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instance
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instance,
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 social work, teaching street football or
homeless
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helping homeless
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people
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.
This
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 phenomenology will attain direct benefit to our personal
life
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,
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.
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 I do agree that the contribution in
community
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 service should be applied in
compulsory
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a compulsory
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 module of
highschool
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high school
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 education design. In
educational
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the educational
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 context, the
student
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 will have three factors that should be improved, which are hard
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skill
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skills
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, soft
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skill
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skills
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, and
life
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skill
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skills
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. Starting from
hardskill
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hard skills
,
It
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it
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 is like an essential part of education which
shape
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shapes
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 a foundation from basic knowledge.
Secondly
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, soft
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skill
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skills
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 will sharpen the way they implement the knowledge.
Last
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 but
no
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not
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 least,
life
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skill
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 contributes significantly to
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student's
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students'
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 personality and behaviour to use their knowledge wisely. By implementing
student
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community
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 service, the pupils will obtain
the
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apply
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strong
life
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skill
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skills
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 that they learn on how to approach the
community
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,
empathize
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empathise
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on
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with
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problem
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problems
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 and focus on
solution
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solutions
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.
In contrast
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, the
impact
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 through
non-profit
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a non-profit
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organization
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organisation
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 is always intangible values. The school requires
standarization
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standardisation
 to grant a merit for
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student
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students
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 based on measurable
action
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actions
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 delivered
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such
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, such
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 as
cognitive
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the cognitive
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 aspect. Unlike psychomotoric
aspect
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aspects
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 like contributing
in
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to
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 society, the teacher faces the challenge to
appreaciate
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appreciate
 the best or the worst performance
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, due
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due
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as
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 to social
impact
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 is
really
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a really
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 subjective
matters
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matter
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.
However
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, the expert
believe
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believes
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 that the highest
of
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level of
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actualization
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actualisation
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 is delivering more sustainable
impact
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. How rich you are
,
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apply
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it
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apply
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means nothing
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while
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when
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 you are surrounded in low economic
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people
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status
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,
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;
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 you
are
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do
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 not
feeling
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feel
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 safe. Naturally, we are
the
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apply
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socialize
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socialised
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creatures
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creatures,
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then
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 we usually hand in hand to encourage
people
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achieving
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to achieve
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 their wealth.

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task
Be clear at the start. Say if you agree or not in one line.
task
Give two or three strong reasons. Each reason with a small example.
coherence
Join ideas with small links like also, for example, and but to flow better.
coherence
Put ideas in short paragrahs. One idea per paragraph.
language
Use easy words. Check spell of common words.
content
Your view on the topic is clear.
content
You talk about life skill and how it helps.
style
Some ideas show good care for others.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community
  • service
  • help
  • people
  • work
  • hours
  • time
  • school
  • class
  • idea
  • argument
  • view
  • agree
  • disagree
  • balance
  • fair
  • equal
  • choice
  • option
  • plan
  • goal
  • problem
  • solution
  • cost
  • stress
  • benefit
  • learn
  • skill
  • team
  • together
  • respect
  • kindness
  • future
  • job
  • career
  • improve
  • practice
  • support
  • study
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