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The line graph below shows US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010.

The line graph reveals an average of annual American spending on mobile phones and home-service phones from 2001 to 2010. Following the advancement of technology in communication, the data illustrates that people tend to utilise mobile cell phones rather than home-based phone service. Their behaviour of using the telephone changes throughout the year. The growth in the usage of handphones is over 4 times, from $200 to $800. Handphone users' spending in 2010 overlapped with that of conventional telephone by about $700 in 2001.
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, the home phone service subscribers declined by over $300. Both the ups and downs of phone utilisation had an intersection in the same amount of spending in 2006, about $550.

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