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Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some photos of your holiday. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter Thank them for the photos and for the holiday Explain why you don't write earlier Invite them to como and stay with you.

Dear Reem, I hope you are doing well. After receiving the photographs of our vacation, I felt overwhelmed to revisit our memories of Toronto. I would like to thank you for your
hospitability
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 and warm welcome during my stay at your house. I framed these pictures on the living room's wall, they
all are
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 cute and special
for
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 me. Since I returned, I
had
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hectic
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 work schedule and multiple
deadline
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 to meet. I missed you so much;
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,
could
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 not write
you
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apply
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back.
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, all the assignments were completed
so
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, so
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,
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 I took time to appreciate your efforts
of
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 making me comfortable at your home. Despite
of
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visiting you
the
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 first
time
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 I never felt like I
am
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at
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in
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some
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 new place
,
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;
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feel
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 like I
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 at my second home. All the credit goes to you!
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, I would love to be your host and return your favours. My city is famous for its delicious food and historical sites. I would take you to all the tourist spots here.
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 to
this
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, my mother would be really excited to make her special pasta for you.
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, thank you so much for giving me lovely memories. I reminisce about them with my family all the time. Give my love to your parents! With warm regards, Reet Sharma

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