You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English speaking friend. In your letter: explain why you changed jobs; describe your new job; tell him/her your other news.

Dear Carol, I hope you are doing well. I would like to share
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good news with you - I got a new job opportunity! I recently joined a new technical company, and I am really enjoying the transition period between my previous job and
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new one. I had decided to switch my work after I
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from my vacation. I was forced to do more work and stay till late hours because I
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from a holiday.
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really affected my mental and physical well-being.
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, I was determined to quit the job
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and search for a new one.
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I did not have any previous experience
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computer programming, I managed to achieve
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position of junior web developer.
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, they would train me for 3 months, before hiring me
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, they provide health and safety benefits for their employees and their families. I would recommend
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check their website and apply for any suitable positions for yourself.
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whole experience has taught me to stay positive in every situation and look forward to better opportunities. I am looking forward
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your reply. Give my regards to your parents! With regards, Reet Bansal

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task response
Explain more why you left and add more detail about the new job and what you hope next.
coherence cohesion
Use small link words and split ideas into new paragraphs for a smoother flow.
tone
The letter is friendly and easy to read.
content
The move and the new job are clear.
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