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The chart illustrates distances traveled per person per week (in kilometers) in terms of 5 types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000.

The bar chart shows the distances of people who
travelled by
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used
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 5 different types of transportation in the UK from 1990 to 2000 per week (in
kilometers
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kilometres
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).
Overall
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, most of the transportation
type
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types
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 show a rise except for people who used a bicycle, motorbike, and air.
Also
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, individuals who travelled by bus, rail have the highest pace. The graph illustrates that in 2000, the person
that
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who
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traveled
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travelled
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 by bus
have
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had
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 passed nearly 45
kilometer
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kilometres
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 per week.
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, in 1990 it was just about 40
kilometer
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kilometres
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. The rail user was almost the same, but
aroune
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around
 10% lower in distance.
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, other transportation users remained steady throughout the years. Only the motorbike user showed a small rise, which was about 5
kilometers
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kilometres
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 between
both
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the
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.
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two.
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In contrast
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, the total distance was about 100
kilometers
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kilometres
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 in 1990, and showed a significant
raise
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rise
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 in 2000.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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