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The line graph illustrates the Dubai gold sales in 2002, showing monthly data points that reflect fluctuations in sales volume throughout the year.

The given line graph highlights the
Dubai
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gold
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sales
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 over a period of twelve months in 2002.
Overall
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, the highest amount of
gold
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sales
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 was in March
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by
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contrast
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Dubai
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gold
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sales
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 had their least and most equal number of
sales
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 in July and September. In January, the
gold
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sales
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 accounted for 200,000,000
Dirhams
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. By February,
Dubai
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gold
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 rose in the number of
sales
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 and peaked at 350,000,000
Dirhams
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, representing the highest
sales
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 point throughout the period.
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, the
sales
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 experienced a decline starting from April at 250 million
Dirhams
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 and ending at approximately 120,000,000
Dirhams
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 in July.
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,
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gold
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sales
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 began to fluctuate from July to October.
In addition
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, the amount of
sales
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 was the same in July and September at almost 120 million
Dirhams
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.
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, the
sales
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 started to rise again in September
reaching
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 around 180,000,000
Dirhams
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 in October. In the
last
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 three
months
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 the
sales
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 of
Dubai
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gold
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 were steady at less than 200 million
Dirhams
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words dubai, gold, sales, dirhams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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