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The plans below show a small theatre in 2010,and the same theatre in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The plans show how the theatre changed over 2 years (2010-2012).
Overall
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, the size of the
amphitheater
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 remains unchanged,
while
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 the size of the
stage
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 has increased.
Finally
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, the cafe is gone with the ticket station ,taking its place. In 2010, Café was on the right-hand corner of the building near the main door. In another corner was the admin service and the ticket office. In the middle of the layout was the auditorium. The dressing room was at the north of the building, between these and the auditorium was the
stage
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. Next to them was storage. After two years, the
amphitheater
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 remains intact. Café gone with ticket office,taking its place. Near the main door on the left side was a restaurant. The admin office was in front of the restaurant.
Stage
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 space increased in size. The corridor took the place of the dressing area. Storage was on the left side of the corridor. On the other side of the
stage
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 was a dressing room with a shower in the south of the dressing room.

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coherence
Use clear link words to show compare and contrast between 2010 and 2012.
structure
Write a short intro that says what the plans are and then give a quick overview.
grammar
Keep grammar simple and stay in past tense for past plans, and be consistent.
vocabulary
Name parts clearly (auditorium, stage, cafe) to show you know the layout.
overview
You show an overall idea that big parts stay the same while some rooms change.
detail
You name the main places in the plan and say how they move.
Fully explain your ideas

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