the graph below shows the percentage of part _time workers in each country of the United Kingdom in 1980 and 2010.

The bar chart depicts part-time
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workers
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workers'
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rates from four different
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United Kingdom
regions,namely England, Northern İreland, Scotland and
Wales
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in
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the
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year
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1980 and 2010.
Overall
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employees
in
Wales
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recieved
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received
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share in the given years. It can be seen that part-time
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personnel
from England, Scotland and
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had experienced an upward trend;
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the reverse was true for
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Ireland. In 1980,
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workers
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compirised
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comprised
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25%.
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it rose to 30%, increasing
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%5 in 2010. These
workers
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reached the rate of
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'
workers
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in the
year
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1980.
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was
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highest point with around 35% in the
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2010. Getting back to details,
Northen İreland
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Northern Ireland
was the third most popular working
areas
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with 15% in1980 wit, and four
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later it declined slowly by 2% and
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reached
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almost 13%. In Scotland, there was a significant difference among
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rates
,
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initially
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comprise
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of
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10% and it doubled
at
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reach 20% in the
year
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2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words workers, wales, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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