The given pie charts compare the varian types of energy power in French families over the course of a decade.

The two pie charts illustrate the comparison of different types of energy production in France during the
period
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from 1995 to 2005.
Over all
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, at the beginning of the
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, Coal accounted for the highest proportion
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of product
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product
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products
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,
whereas
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Other contributed the least. By the end of the
period
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, Coal emerged as the dominant product,
while
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other
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recorded the lowest share. As the charts show, in 1995, the Nuclear and Gas began at 6.40% and 29.63%,
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rose moderately to reach 10.10% and 30.31%, the second largest
one
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by
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2005.
the
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Petro started at 29.27% in 1995 and dropped quickly, reaching 19.55%, which was the third largest
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at the end
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of the
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.
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, the Coal stood at 29.80%,
accounted
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for the largest share.
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, it increased slowly to reach 30.93%, ending at the largest
one
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by 2005. The Other commenced at 4.90%, hitting the smallest share in 1995.
Subsequently
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, it grew gradually to 9.10%, and remained the smallest
one
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at the end
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words period, one with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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