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The table and chart show the time spent on leisure and household activities by men and women in a country in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and line chart illustrate the average number of
minutes
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 per
day
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 that
men
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 and
women
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 spent on various activities related to leisure and household tasks in a country in 2008.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
men
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 spent more
time
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 than
women
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 on entertainment through digital media and playing games.
In contrast
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,
women
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 devoted more
time
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 to most of the other activities. In 2008, both
men
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 and
women
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 spent the greatest amount of
time
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 on digital media, averaging 137 and 118
minutes
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 per
day
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, respectively. The second highest amount of
time
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 was spent on food preparation, at approximately 25
minutes
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 per
day
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 for
men
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 compared with 78
minutes
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 for
women
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.
In addition
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,
men
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 spent around 20
minutes
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 less per
day
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 than
women
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 on washing and ironing clothes. For activities
such
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 as sport, reading, and repair work, both genders spent fewer than 20
minutes
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 per
day
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 on average.
Moreover
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,
women
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 spent about 10
minutes
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 more per
day
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 than
men
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 on shopping.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, day, men, women, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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