Some people think that cinemas will one day close due to the popularity of online streaming services for film and series. Do you agree or disagree?

It is often argued that all
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will be closed since there are more online streaming
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available. I disagree with
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statement because the experience of visiting the
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can not be replaced. Regardless
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popular the online streaming gets, the experience
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of watching
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on
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huge screen can not be possible at home. There is new technology
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as
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and 4D, which
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the
movie
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more attractive. The
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system is usually better than
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as well. Going to the movies with friends or family
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also
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great
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memory and makes the experience more fun. I strongly believe there
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be a demand
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the
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cinemas
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due to
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the reasons listed above.
On the other hand
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, it is
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fact that online streaming is more
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. More people
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started enjoying movies and
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series at home
and
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it is easier to access online streaming anytime
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, anywhere
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than physically going to watch a
movie
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.
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to that, the numbers of shows at the
cinemas
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are limited depending on the day,
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all
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types
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of shows are accessible online 24/7. Because of these reasons, there
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less
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fewer
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customers at the
cinemas
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and
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it makes them
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shut down the business. In conclusion, I believe there will be
less
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fewer
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movie
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theaters
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theatres
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in the future for sure, but a few
number of
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apply
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theater
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business
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businesses
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will survive.
so
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I don't think all
cinemas
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will be completely closed.

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task response
Be clearer about your main view at the start. For example: 'I disagree that all cinemas will close.'
coherence and cohesion
Make the link from one idea to the next with simple words like 'also', 'but', 'so' so the writing flows.
strength
Your view is easy to see.
strength
You give reasons for your view, not just one idea.
strength
You use some real examples like big screen and home view.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example
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