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Most countries allow 18-year olds to start driving a car. Some say it is good to allow at this age. But others think that the age to start driving should be at least 25. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

Nowadays
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Nowadays,
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 there is a debate over which is the best
age
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 to start driving a
car
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.
Mainly
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Mainly,
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 it is allowed to drive a vehicle from the
age
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 of 18,
while
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 some people argue that the minimum
age
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 should be at least 25. Both views of
this
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 argument will be analysed and discussed in
this
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 essay before drawing a reasoned conclusion.
Firstly
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, driving a
car
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 at an early
age
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 gives practice and learning
of
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in
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 taking responsibility for your actions.
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,
while
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 driving a
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car
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car,
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 you are getting skills of being focused and patient.
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, young people
succeeding
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to become
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in becoming
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 mature
in
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apply
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a
quicker
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quickly
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 way in
compare
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compared
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 to
other
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others
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 one's who don't drive a
car
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.
Nevertheless
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,
inresponsible
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irresponsible
 driving a vehicle could lead to severe consequences. Usually, people
at
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under
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 the
age
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under
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of
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 25 tend to make spontaneous and foolish actions,
such
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 as driving at high speeds or drunk driving, which
increase
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increases
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 the number of
car
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 accidents on the roads.
Therefore
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,
this
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 makes it more sensible to wait until 25 years old to become
more
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a more
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 attentive and calm person. To summarise, both views of the argument concerning
about
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apply
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the proper
age
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 to start driving a
car
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 have strong support.
However
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, I believe that it is possible to start driving a
car
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 at the
age
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 of 18 after passing additional tests with strong training and strict rules.
Otherwise
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, if it is not
possible
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possible,
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 it is better to wait until 25
in
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on
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 some special occasions.

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content
The essay answers the task and gives your view, but add more clear reasons for each view.
cohesion
Improve linking and flow between ideas with more signposts (for example, also, besides, as a result).
grammar
Fix mistakes in grammar and word form (e.g., 'inresponsible' should be 'irresponsible', 'compare' → 'compared').
structure
You state your own view clearly in the end.
cohesion
You use sequence markers like Firstly and Nevertheless to guide the reader.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age
  • driving
  • car
  • license
  • road
  • safety
  • risk
  • crash
  • accident
  • judge
  • mature
  • training
  • practice
  • learning
  • supervision
  • independence
  • responsibility
  • rule
  • law
  • policy
  • government
  • allow
  • wait
  • time
  • plan
  • opinion
  • benefit
  • drawback
  • evidence
  • example
  • study
  • survey
  • family
  • parents
  • peers
  • drunk driving
  • alcohol
  • speed
  • seat belt
  • punishment
  • fine
  • consequence
  • future
  • work
  • school
  • country
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