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The internet has changed the world. Many people think it has been a positive change. Others think it has caused problems. Give the advantages and disadvantages of the internet.

What do you know about the
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?The
Internet
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 has many
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 on our society.It has many advantages and disadvantages.In
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 am going to discuss the good and negative
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. The
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 has many advantages for humanity.
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it learning us how we can do our homework. Second,we can know new information and get it from the
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.Third,we can donate some money to a man who takes care of .
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, it may change both modes and feelings, or make somebody fellings happy . And we can take some instructions or many details
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 work or anything we want to know about it .
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 , the
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 may have some disadvantages.Some lights in the phone cause eye problems and a weak body.
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, it causes many problems and negative
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 on our brain and focus.Some people say that
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 the
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 , especially the phone and laptop , in their day 14 hours , and
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 is the biggest and greatest problem in their daily routine .
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, the
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 bad
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 on our work. It makes us feel we do not have any time to do our homework . In conclusion , we should use the
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 wisely, and
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not waste our time doing nothing.
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 we should be advised a people who use the
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 all day to avoid
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 in their bad daily routine
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and do not waste their time on the
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 or something like that , like mobile phones and Pc or playstations.

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content
It has an idea of the good and bad sides of the internet.
structure
There is an introduction and a conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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