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“Urbanization has brought both opportunities and challenges to modern societies. Discuss the social problems associated with rapid urban growth and suggest possible solutions.”

It is argued by some that cities can bring both opportunities and challenges to communities.
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rapid
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the rapid
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 growth of
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urbanization
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urbanisation
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 is a significant concern,
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 essay will discuss the possible measures to address the cause. One major problem is
that
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the lack of infrastructure in
urbangrowth
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urban growth
. The reason is that the infrastructure
is kept
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a
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pace
by
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with
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 the
rapid
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rapidly
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 growing cities.
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, it leads to overcrowding and traffic congestion.
In addition
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, the slums, which are inadequate living
condition
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conditions
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, these areas are lack basic
service
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services
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such
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 as clean water and electricity.
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, the population can cause health
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issues
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, poor hygiene, and
unsafe
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an unsafe
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 living environment. Another challenge is that
the
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urbanization
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urbanisation
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 may affect
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environmentally
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 degradation
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 can lead to deforestation and loss of biodiversity.
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, the growth of
industrials
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industries
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 and vehicles can affect the air and water pollution.
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, the people will have
severe
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 health impact.
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,
the
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urbanization
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urbanisation
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 has
carried
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led
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 the social inequality among
population
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the population
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. Some people benefit
economic
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from economic
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 opportunities
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 others who have low income may
left
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 behind.
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 the gap between
rich
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the rich
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 and
poor
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the poor
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 in urban settings.
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, the
wealthiers
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wealthier
 may have better services than the
poors
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poor
. There are three possible solutions to the problem of
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urbanization
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urbanisation
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. One way to tackle
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 is
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to create
a
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sustainable urban development practices by the government and city planners.
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include
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includes
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 smart infrastructure management
such
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 as efficient public transportation systems and water management. The second measure to address
to
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cities is
that
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to prioritise the preservation of green
area
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areas
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 and mitigate environmental impact. As an example, green parks and natural areas
maintain
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 the pollution of air and reduce carbon
emmision
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emissions
. The third
suggestions
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suggestion
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 is
that
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to provide necessary education, health care, and job training for
low income
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low-income
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 communities to
adress
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address
 the social inequality. In conclusion, regardless of the reasons for growing urban areas, having sustainable development systems,
environmental
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environmentally
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 friendly space preservation, and implementing
on
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apply
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the needs
for
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of
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low income
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low-income
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 people can be effective in challenges of rapid urban growth.

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Planning
Plan your essay first: make 1 intro, 2 body parts (one on problems, one on solutions), and a short conclusion.
Structure
Start each paragraph with a clear idea and use simple links like 'and', 'but', 'also' to connect ideas.
Accuracy
Use simple grammar and fix spelling. Check words like infrastructure, pollution, and inequality.
Content
The essay tries to cover both sides: problems and solutions.
Structure
There is an overall plan: intro, body, conclusion.
Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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