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You recently missed an important appointment because of a mistake by a service provider (e.g., a doctor, a government office, or a travel agency). Write a letter to the service provider. In your letter: •Explain what the appointment was and when it was scheduled •Describe what mistake occurred that caused you to miss it •Say what you would like the service provider to do

Answer Dear officer, I am writing
this
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 letter regarding missing an important
appointment
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due to
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minor
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a minor
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 misunderstanding. The
appointment
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 was
of
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apply
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today in the
visa
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 office, to get my passport stamped with a temporary resident
visa
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 for Canada, which is extremely essential for me, as I am travelling
their
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there
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 next week. There was a minor confusion about the address given on the website
,
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. Online
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online
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online,
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 the address is listed as 47 Balmoral Dr.
,
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;
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however
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, recently, the
visa
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 offer has been relocated to 86 Hanwell Dr., which has not been updated on the website. I had no knowledge about
it’s
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its
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 relocation, which caused me inconvenience. Because of
this
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 issue, I missed my
appointment
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, as I visited 47 Balmoral Dr.
and
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, and
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 there I was informed about the relocation. I want to request a new
appointment
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 for the same purpose
, if
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. If
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 possible, could you please book me for the earliest possible
appointment
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, as my flight tickets are already booked to Canada, and without the
visa
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 stamp, I cannot travel. I hope you will look into
this
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 issue and help me
to
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apply
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resolve
this
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 problem. Thank you in advance. Yours sincerely, Kanishka

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content
Add the exact date and time of the missed appointment to be clear.
task
Say clearly what you want the provider to do next, such as rebook as soon as possible.
structure
Use shorter sentences and break ideas into two or three small parts for easier reading.
coherence
Use linking words to show the order of events (for example: first, then, finally).
task
The letter states the purpose and asks for a new appointment.
tone
Polite closing with a signature.
Contractions

Formal and informal language refers to using different forms of language in different settings.

In informal writing, you can use contractions such as I’ll and Сan’t.

In formal writing, you should write I will and Can not.

Do not use exclamation mark in formal writing, but you can use it in informal writing.

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