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some people believe that unpaid community services should be a compulsory part of the high school curriculum (for example working for a charity improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to young children).To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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communty
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community
 service as
mandatory
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 subject for senior year students should be obligatory.
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 some agree
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this
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favor
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notion
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,
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 personally oppose
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 notion,as compulsory community can interfere
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with academic priorities. Schools need additional courses for public services,because
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 can enhance students' interpersonal skills.If young learners are given an opportunity to teach subjects to junior classes,it will be beneficial for their own moral development. I firmly believe that
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their sense of responsibility can be improved through holistic educational practices. What many people overlook is that volunteering can impose an additional burden.More attention should have been given to academically demanding courses.
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fulfillment
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 programs play a crucial role in adolescence.Always do they
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 development-oriented
module
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. In conclusion,
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 acknowledge that
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 obligatory services,young learners
instill
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 values in students.
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 they support
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 idea, its long-term effects remain uncertain.

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Task Response
Task response: You show a view but do not go deep. Add more clear reasons and simple examples. Make plan and add a clear end statement.
Coherence and Cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use clear order. Have an intro, body, and conclusion. Use simple linking words like and, but, because, then, also.
Content
You show a clear view on the topic.
Ideas
You give ideas on how service may affect school work and moral growth.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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