A friend of yours is thinking of going to a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friends. In your letter, Explain why you think your friend would enjoy camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go on camping with your friend this summer

Dear Tom, How are you? I hope

this

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letter finds you in

your

Correct pronoun usage

apply

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good health and spirit. I'm writing

this

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letter to highlight some useful information about the summer

trip

Use synonyms

bali

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Bali

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, which is organised by our school for a week.

Firstly

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You

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you

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will love to explore the culture and tradition of

Indonesian

Correct article usage

the Indonesian

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people.

Besides

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, there are ancient

moneuments

Correct your spelling

monuments

and forts, which

reflects

Correct subject-verb agreement

reflect

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the history of

bali

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Bali

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Moreover

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, the festival

eve's

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eve

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is ongoing

and

Punctuation problem

, and

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it is mandatory to make a group of two

inorder

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in order

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to participate

the

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in the

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competition. The

winner

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winning

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team will be allocated

with

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apply

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the prize. The demerit of going alone is

you

Correct word choice

that you

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will feel lost

Punctuation problem

, as

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most of the students have small group circles.

Besides

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the boat racing competition,

where

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apply

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having a

contemporaries

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contemporary

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is necessary

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otherwise

Punctuation problem

; otherwise

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taking

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, taking

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part will be prohibited.

Therefore

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, I would like to join

with

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apply

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you for the

trip

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so that we can enjoy the

trip

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together and share our memories with our families and peers. Plus,

Going

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going

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together can

helps

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help

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us to cut off the extra cost because we can share our things together. I hope to see you soon

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the

trip

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. Please get back to me whenever you're free. Best regards, Jack

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content

Stay on one topic: camping for a trip. The letter talks about Bali; focus on camping.

structure

Use one main idea per paragraph. Start with why camping is good, then a downside, then if you would go with your friend.

grammar

Fix spelling and grammar. Words like monuments, in order, and proper spacing.

cohesion

Link ideas with simple words like and, but, also, so.

tone

Keep a warm and friendly tone for a letter to a friend.

content

Check the task steps and show you would like to camp with your friend.

greeting and closing

Nice opening and closing; polite and friendly.

tone

Good tone for a letter; warm and kind.

content

The writer shows a real wish to join and share the trip.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
24
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

201 words

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