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The graph shows the amount of money spent on book in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

The line graph describes how much money people spent on books in four different Countries over a
10 years
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10-year
 period. Germany, France and Australia have
similar
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a similar
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 trend,
while
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 Italy is quite different from the other Nations during the first years. After that
period
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period,
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 the four lines are quite similar. Between 1995 and 1999, Germany spent much
moneys
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money
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 with a gradual
increase
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 from 80 to 90
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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US dollars.
Therefore
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,
this
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 Country has a slow decline between 1999 to 2003, with a
minumum
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minimum
 of almost 85
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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Dollars
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Dollars,
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 followed by a progressive
increase
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. Austria and France are similar to Germany during the first four years.
Therefore
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,
while
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 France has a period of
increase
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 from 1999 to 2001 followed by a steady state, Austria has a steady state followed by an
increase
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 over the same time periods.
Thereafter
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, money spent on books progressively increases from 2003 to 2005 in both these Countries. Oppositely, Italy has some fluctuations between 1995 and
1999
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1999,
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 followed by a progressive
increase
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of
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in
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 USD spent on books until 2005.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "therefore, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 6 times.
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