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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The provided line graph illustrates the proportions of Australian
trade
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 with four different countries (
Japan
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,
US
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the US
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,
China
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 and
India
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) between 1990 and 2012.
Overall
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, the
trade
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 with
China
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 showed a considerable
up ward
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upward
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 trend over the period,
whereas
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 with
India
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 showed a steady but increasing trend.
On the other hand
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, both
of
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the US and
Japan
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 experienced some
of
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fluctutions
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fluctuations
 with a fall
over
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in the period. In 1990,
Japan
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's exports started at nearly 25%,
while
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 the US at around 12% and both
of
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China
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 and
India
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weren
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were
 only
amlost
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around
 4% and 3% respectively.
Japan
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 had many
of
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fluctutions
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fluctuations
 over the years and reached
to
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about 17% in 2005,
then
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 it
rockted
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rose
at
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to
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 20% and declined again until 2012 at 18%.
By contrast
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,
China
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 and
India
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 went in opposite
direction
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,
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China
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's
trade
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 rose significantly and surpassed
Japan
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 in
nearly
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2007 and continued
climbed
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 to
reached
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reach
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 the peak of
period
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the period
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 at 28% in 2012. The
trade
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 of
India
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 grew
slowley
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slowly
 at around 5% in 2002
and
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, and
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then
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 it climbed rapidly and surpassed the US in 2006 and become at 7% and
then
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fall
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fell
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over
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again.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words trade, japan, china, india with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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