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Band 2.5

Some people think employers should not care about the way their employees dress, but the quality at work. To what extent you agree or disagree?

Companies have rules
to
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employee
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them
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how their
employere
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employees
 present themselves by wearing an attribute or uniform. In
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this
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these
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 modern days, not many
company
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companies
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 provide a uniform for their
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employees
due to
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 many factors
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such
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 as expressing
employees
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' self and what is more
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 at
work
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employers'
quality
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 of
work
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. I believe that employers should just take care of their
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employee
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employees
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work
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 rather
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than
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 dictating their
employees
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' way to dress. The essential thing about working is
a
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great
quality
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 of
work
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 is made. With the opportunity to express someone's
self
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 through fashion, I believe
employees
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 will feel safe and will be focusing on their productivity. These days, more and more employers are more
focus
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 on what
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employee
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employees
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 can bring to the table,
such
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 as
quality
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 of
work
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, rather than how they dress. But it is
also
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 important to have some
restrain
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 for their
employee
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 on how they represent their company by dressing. As little as
,
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 dressing politely. Indeed, there are some companies that require their
employee
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 to dress in
certain
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 way, and have a uniform. But as long as their
employee
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 agree,
then
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 I don't think it is a problem. For me,
company
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 should just focus on their
employees
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'
quality
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 of
work
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 because I believe that the essential thing about working is to
have
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produce
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a
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apply
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good
quality
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of
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work
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produce
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development
The essay needs a clear view from start and more reasons to back it up.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words to show how each idea fits the main point.
examples
Give one or two real, short examples to back up points.
stance
The writer shows a clear view on the topic.
content
Some idea about work quality and self expression is noted.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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