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The three pictures show the position of a volcano, and a village before and after volcanic eruption.

The three diagrams illustrate the location of a
volcano
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 and the changes that occurred in a nearby village before and after a volcanic
eruption
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.
Overall
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, the
eruption
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 had a dramatic impact on the western part of the
island
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, where the
volcano
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 was located,
while
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 the eastern side of the
village
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island
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 remained relatively unaffected. Several houses and natural features were destroyed, and the lava flow significantly altered the landscape. Before the
eruption
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, the
volcano
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 was situated in the western region of the
island
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. The village consisted of two main clusters of houses: a larger circular settlement in the centre and a smaller one in the east. Palm trees were scattered across the
island
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, particularly around the settlements. Following the
eruption
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, lava flowed from the
volcano
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 down towards the centre of the
island
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.
As a result
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, the central settlement was completely destroyed,
along with
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 many trees in that area. The western coastline
also
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 appears to have been reshaped
due to
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 the
eruption
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.
In contrast
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, the eastern cluster of houses remained intact,
although
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 some trees nearby disappeared. In summary, the volcanic
eruption
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 caused substantial damage to the central and western areas of the
island
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,
whereas
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 the eastern part experienced minimal change.

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structure
Give a short map of the changes in order, say what was where before and after.
task
Add a clear view that lists the main changes first, then the details.
accuracy
Check facts from the diagram and only say what you can see.
coherence
Use more words to link ideas, like then, next, and as a result.
structure
The word 'before' and 'after' show in the plan.
content
The ending sums the long line of change.
language
The essay keeps a simple and clear style.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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