The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.

The bar chart gives information about the different types of telephone calls in the UK, measured in
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, over a period of 7 years, from 1995 to 2002.
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it is clear that
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the local calls experienced the largest group throughout the period,
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the figure for mobile calls was the smallest;
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it narrowed the gap between other calls. In 1995, the number of local calls was the highest at about 72
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minutes
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, which showed a significant climb to 90
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minutes
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in 1999, reaching its peak.
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it saw a moderate decrease from 85
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to 70
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between 2000 and 2002. Moving to the remaining categories. In 1995, the figure for
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calls was higher than that of mobile calls, the former at 39
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minutes
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, the latter at 3
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minutes
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. Both of two groups witnessed a slight increase from 1995 to 2002. The fixed line stayed in the second group at 60
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minutes
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at the end
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while
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mobile calls reached 40
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minutes
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still narrowed
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the
gap between each group.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, minutes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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