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The debate exists on whether young people should have the freedom to select their own profession or if they should adopt a pragmatic approach, considering their future more seriously. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The future is in our hands
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, or
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 so they say.
Decision
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The decision
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 on what course to
pertake
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pursue
 lies so much
on
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with
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 an individual. An often debated topic on whether young persons should have freedom to choose
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their owns
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owns
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own
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 profession or adopt a different approach has been ongoing for
sometime
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some time
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. Both sides will be discussed in
this
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 essay and
opinion
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an opinion
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made
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will be made
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. On the
one
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 hand,
people
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 believe that life is more
hands on
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hands-on
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 than theory.Mechanical engineering
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, fir
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fir
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for
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 starters, requires
one
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 to assess and make amends
of
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to
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 a vehicle by touching it.
considering
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Considering
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 the future
on
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of
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one
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apply
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being a farmer,
people
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 tend to choose
pragmatic
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a pragmatic
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 approach
than
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rather than
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 wasting
alot
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a lot
 of years studying to later
own
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apply
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become a farmer.
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this
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This
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 approach has really saved
people
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on
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from
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wastage
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the wastage
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 of time and resources.
On the other hand
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,
people
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shoud
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should
 choose their own courses depending on what they love
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. For
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for
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example
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example,
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 a person with
passion
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a passion
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 for medicine and is bright should not think twice but go for his or her heart's desires.
For
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example
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 my sister had a passion for being a teacher when growing up
and
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, and
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 after finishing her form four
level
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level,
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 she pursued teaching following her strong desire to be a teacher. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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i
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I
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 strongly support
one
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 choosing passion over
any thing
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anything
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 else
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, beibg
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beibg
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because
 each and every morning you will be going to work with happiness
knowing
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, knowing
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 you are going to give your best at work. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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people
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 should be allowed and supported fully in whatever direction they
pertake
Correct your spelling
pursue
 in choosing a profession

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structure
Plan each part before you write. Use a clear intro, two body para, and a short conclusion.
content
Keep ideas simple and show one idea per para. Use one example for each idea.
coherence
Use linking words to show the link between ideas, such as first, also, but, however, finally.
language
Check grammar and spelling. Short sentences help.
structure
You state your view and use On the one hand / On the other hand.
content
You try to give an example from life.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • empowers
  • fulfilling careers
  • personal satisfaction
  • job security
  • potential earnings
  • market demand
  • pragmatic choice
  • stability
  • secure future
  • intertwining
  • emerging market trends
  • innovation
  • ecosystem
  • guidance
  • skill development
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