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You recently attended a training course for your work. Your employer has asked you for your feedback on the training course. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter remind your employer what the course was about explain why the course was useful to you in your work suggest why the course may not be suitable for some of your other colleagues You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ............. ,

Dear Manager, I am Chris, I really appreciate
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your support for my training course
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 I am writing to report my feedback about it. I would say
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 is a significant training. It taught me practical skills of operating a
forklift
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,
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 and basic knowledge about the high-risk work environment. I have been working in
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 warehouse for half
year
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, and just like you said, it is necessary for me to be able to operate
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forklift
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a forklift
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, it
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 is not only beneficial for
myself
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, but
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 for the management team, as our company
is
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 growing
up
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in recent years, we need more
forklift
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 drivers.
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 is a great opportunity to learn a new skill, so I encourage other coworkers to do
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.
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, it is not suitable for everyone. Operating
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forklift
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a forklift
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 requires some courage to lift goods to
very
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a very
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 high position, and
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this
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 needs to be really careful.
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,
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 is a consideration for anyone who would like to do
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 training. Thank you for your time to read my feedback. Your sincerely Chris

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structure
Break the letter into clear parts. Start with a short line that says what the course is, then three parts: what you learned, how it helps your work, and who might not fit. End with a simple closing.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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