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Band 3

The best way to reduce traffic congestion is to provide a free public transport service. To what extent do you agree or disagree?. Give your opinion and examples from your own experience.

In the modern world, there is an ongoing debate about whether providing a free public
transport
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 service is the best way to reduce
traffic
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congestion
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.
This
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 trend has become increasingly
relevent
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relevant
 in today's society. I partially agree with
this
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 view for several reasons.
First,
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providing
a
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apply
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free public
transportation
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 reduces the
numbers
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number
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 of cars, which
relieves
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reduces
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 the possibility of
traffic
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congestion
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.
the one
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One
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 of the main reasons for heavy
traffic
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 is
numerous
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the numerous
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 vehicles, so it might be helpful to
decline
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reduce
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 the
traffic
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congestion
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.
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, in South Korea, the public
transportation
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 system has good quality, which
makes
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results in
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 less heavy
traffic
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, even though there
are
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is are
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unexpendented
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unprecedented
 number of personal cars.
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, offering
a
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apply
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free public
transport
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 can't be the best solution to address
this
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 issue. Because
,
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apply
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 if many people try to take
bus
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the bus
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 or subway, they will struggle to commute during rush hour, which can
make
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cause
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 new
congestion
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 in
the
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apply
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public
transport
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.
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, in South Korea, the public
try
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tries
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 to use
bus
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the bus
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 or subway
due to
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 the good
transport
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 system, but during rush hour, they are
strugglling
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struggling
 to commute as there are a lot of people
in
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on
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subway
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the subway
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. In conclusion, letting
a
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apply
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public
transportation
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free
Verb problem
be free
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 is one of the good
idea
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ideas
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 to
decline
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reduce
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the
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apply
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heavy
traffic
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, but it can't be the best way to address
this
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 trend because there
is
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are
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limitation
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limitations
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 to
use
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using
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a
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apply
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public
transportation
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.
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this
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This
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 is the reason I partially agree with
this
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 view.

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task
Be clear on your view in the first line and keep it in every part of the essay.
structure
Put one main idea in each para and give one or two simple examples.
grammar
Correct key errors in spelling and use easy, common words. short sentences help.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas go from one to the next, like first, then, also, but, in the end.
examples
Give real life things you see or feel. If you mention a place, say what you saw that backs it up.
content
You show a view of being 'partially agree', which fits the task.
structure
Two sides are shown, and there is a basic idea of what free transport can do.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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