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Human activities have negative effects on plant and animal species. Some people think it is too late to do anything about this problem. Others believe that effective measures can be taken to improvw this situation. Discuss both view and give our opinion.

These days
there
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the
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that
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 human activities are destroying the fauna and flora
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;
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 some think it is over to solve
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 issue, but others
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believe
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 the way to save the environment. I personally believe that we can fix it still
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 in
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 essay, I will elaborate on the reasons as to why I think so. First and
foremost
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foremost,
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 there are millions
person
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of people
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that
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who
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doesn’t
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don’t
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 care about
the
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apply
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nature and
animals
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. I think these are the
people
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that
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who
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 don’t believe.
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Therefore
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Therefore,
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 they are not doing the
recycle
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recycling
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, they are feeding the
animals
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 with
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the wrongs
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wrongs
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wrong
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 foods.
For
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example
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example,
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 in
Australia
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Australia,
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has
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there are
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 bushfires, the government always have
a
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plans and rules to control
it
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them
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. But there are some guys doing fire to have fun, it can be devasted for the vegetation and for the
habit
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animal habitat
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animals
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.
In
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another
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the
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hand
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other hand
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the
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, the
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 activists
that
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who
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 really
cares
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care
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 about the
plant
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plants
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 and
animals
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,
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apply
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they
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apply
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believe
because
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that
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 they
are
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take action to create ways and work hard to save
safe
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our jungles, rivers,
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and forest
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forest
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forests
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. In
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instances
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instance
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instance,
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 these
people
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 are participating in
NGO
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an NGO
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 that has
meeting
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meetings
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, ideas for
increase
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increasing
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 the number of
people
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that
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who
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 can think about our environment. In my point of view, we
just
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can just
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will
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apply
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improve
this
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 really important topic
believing
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by believing
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 and doing some programs, using the media to share
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and
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, and
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 more
people
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 in the world
change
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can change
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your
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their
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 mindset about it. By way of my conclusion, based on the arguments that I have explained
above
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above,
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 I am of the opinion that if we want
live
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to live
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 in peace with
our
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apply
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nature, we must have to take care.

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content
Plan your essay. Start with a short note on both sides, then give your own view.
structure
Make a clear sentence for each paragraph. Use a topic sentence to show the main idea.
grammar
Use easy grammar. Check plural forms and verb form in past and present.
development
Give one good example for each point. Make sure it fits the idea about nature.
coherence
Finish with a clear end line that restates your view.
task
The writer tries to show both sides of the issue.
content
There are some examples and a hope to fix the issue.
coherence
The text shows some plan to use media and work to raise the mind set.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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