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Band 3.5

the plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The picture illustrates Porth Harbour’s site plan in 2000 and the recent plan.
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, it is generally shown that there are several developments, including new developments and facilities for the harbour’s visitors. In 2000, there was only one dock which could
accomodate
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accommodate
 two
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passenger’
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passengers’
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passengers
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 ferries at a time. The dock was close to the public beach on the north side of the harbour. Today, one additional jetty has been built beside the existing one,
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then
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so
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 three ferries can be docked at once in the harbour.
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, the area for fishing boats is in reverse with the private yachts’ dock, where the marina, the private yachts area, is now located at the south of the harbour. The previous public beach on the south side
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 is now changed to a private beach dedicated to hotel guests nearby. The hotel utilised the castle’s building, which was no longer used. Additional public facilities,
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 as a shower room, toilets, cafes & shops are
also
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 built at the side of the road.

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coherence
Make the flow of ideas clear. Present features in a simple order and add a short compare at the end.
clarity
Fix unclear parts. Replace phrases like 'in reverse' with direct words that show change in place.
vocabulary
Use plain and exact words. Keep wording short and easy.
grammar
Check small grammar and spelling like 'accomodate' should be 'accommodate'.
content
The answer mentions both plans and shows change over time.
structure
There is an overall idea of what changed, with some linking words.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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