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Students are becoming more and more reliant in the Internet. While the internet is convenient, it has many negative effects and its use for educational purposes should be restricted. How far do you agree with this statement?

Currently
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conquering
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 more and more trust from
students
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 and becoming the easiest and
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most reliable source of information
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 learners.
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internet
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’s reliability is questionable
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 someone can believe
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 that
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 of it should be measured. I completely disagree with
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 statement, because nowadays
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the Internet
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 contributes to the acquisition of a significant part of knowledge. First of all, banning
Internet
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 usage is unrealistic. It is impossible to isolate pupils from the main source of information nowadays,
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 after reducing
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the significance
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 of paper books, journals and newspapers. Broadly speaking,
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 decision will
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 the education system. I understand the concern about
students
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 using AI to do their academic work, but its writing style is usually easy to
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recognise
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, and blocking important websites because of a few dishonest
students
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 is not fair.
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Internet
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The Internet
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 contains a lot of knowledge
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that is
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 not available in university libraries
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consequently
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students
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 can find
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the necessary
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 works only online. What is more, it is important not to restrict access to the websites, but to teach
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 the difference between them.
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 where people express their opinions on some topics is not as relevant as research,
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 can
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founded
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found
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 online
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. In
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 universities can install a block for some programs and sites on system computers and give access to
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 only on these devices.
However
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, in my opinion, it somehow limits learners from learning in convenient places. In conclusion,
although
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 some people question the reliability of the
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 and argue that its use should be restricted, I truly believe that it is an essential and valuable source of knowledge for
students
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 today.

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development
Make your main idea clear in the first paragraph and stay on it. Add one strong example or fact to back each point.
structure
Use one idea per paragraph. Start with a topic sentence that states the point.
grammar
Check grammar and punctuation. Use simple sentences and avoid long runs.
coherence
Link your ideas with clear words like 'also', 'however', 'because', 'so' to help flow.
task
Address the opposite view briefly to show you see both sides, then explain why your view is still best.
content
Clear stance against the idea of banning the internet.
structure
Good structure with intro, body, and conclusion.
coherence
Use of linking phrases to connect ideas.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • independent learning
  • critical thinking
  • excessive reliance
  • hinder
  • crucial
  • problem-solving
  • overly dependent
  • diversity
  • perspectives
  • global cultures
  • enriching
  • unrestricted
  • information overload
  • discerning
  • credible sources
  • incorporation
  • engagement
  • adaptivity
  • personalized learning
  • innovative
  • pedagogy
  • digital age
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