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Band 4.5

The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table
provide
Correct subject-verb agreement
provides
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kay
Use the right word
key
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 information about the
deffence
Correct your spelling
defence
 amount between three years, in
Netherlands
Correct article usage
the Netherlands
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 and Australia
also
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 Tanzania and Guatemala.
Overall
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, it is clear
the
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from the
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 graph that
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 ,
in addition
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to Tanzania
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Tanzania
Punctuation problem
Tanzania,
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 had
good
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a good
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 amount
in
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over
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 throw three years , but
about
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apply
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Australia
get
Wrong verb form
has been getting
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 lower from
year
Use synonyms
 to
year
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 .
According to
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 what is shown Netherlands is
better
Correct article usage
the better
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ones
Fix the agreement mistake
one
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 when we see the amounts
it
Punctuation problem
. It
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get
Wrong verb form
got
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 better
last
Linking Words
year
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,
Punctuation problem
.
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 Australia in 1990 had
good
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a good
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year
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but
Punctuation problem
, but
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 it
get
Wrong verb form
got
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 lower
year
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 after
year
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. In terms of
Correct your spelling
Tanzania
Tanzaniz
Add a comma
Tanzaniz,
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 I saw
better
Correct article usage
a better
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deffrence
Correct your spelling
difference
 from
year
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 to
year
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 had 87,00 in 1990 and 1,42,000 in 2000
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also
Fix capitalization
Also
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 1,55,000
Punctuation problem
, that
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that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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mean
Correct subject-verb agreement
means
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 there is
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an incrases
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incrases
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increase
 in
amount
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the amount
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 ,
also
Linking Words
guateamala
Correct your spelling
Guatemala
.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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