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The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph provided illustrates car theft per thousand vehicles in four countries from 1990 to 1999.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the UK
stayed
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had
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 the highest level of car theft at the beginning of the given
period
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 until the end of the given
period
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, even though it had a fluctuation during the
period
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. Meanwhile, Sweden had a gradual rise,
while
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 the other two countries had a slight decrease compared to the beginning of the
period
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. Looking at the graph more closely, one can see that Great Britain peaked at a high of 20 in 1991,
then
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 there was a slight drop before the figure for Great Britain fluctuated. At
end
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 of the
period
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, the UK remained the same as 18 in 1990. Meanwhile, Sweden had a considerable rise and increased
at
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by
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 10 during the given
period
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.
Furthermore
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, France and Canada started with roughly 9 and 7, respectively; they had a fluctuation
eve
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even
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 though they recorded the lowest figure at 5 in 1999.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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