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Giving lectures in halls to large numbers of people is an outdated method of teaching. With the technology available today, there is no justification to it, and everything should be done online.*

It has been argued that teaching a large number of
students
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 in lecture halls is
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 as it could be done seamlessly online. It is my opinion that online tutoring yields greater productivity, reduces distraction, and is more convenient for both the teacher and the
students
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.
This
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 essay outlines how teaching online reduces distraction, improves concentration, and is more convenient to both the teacher and
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 alike. The
invent
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 of technology has improved various areas of human development, and the educational sector was not left unattended. Online tutoring has improved the quality of teaching by reducing distractions
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by
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 teaching a large crowd in a hall.
Students
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 are
characterized
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 with differential motives of being in attendance for a lecture, and as
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,
noise making
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 and distractions become the order of the day, which in turn disrupts the effective transmission/ delivery of
lectures
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, a recent survey carried out on
second year
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 undergraduate
students
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 of the accountancy department of Imo State University recorded distractions during
lectures
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 as a major challenge to their poor academic performance.
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, online tutoring is more convenient for both the teacher and
students
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 since the need to convey in a hall to deliver and receive classes has been ruled out
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students
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 can attend their classes from the comfort of their homes.
This
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 convenience makes it easier for
students
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 to assimilate the
lectures
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 in a more conducive environment, and the implication is an enhanced concentration level. For instance, an interview
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 a lecturer of the University of Nigeria
Nsukka
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who
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have
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 embraced technology
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 to the convenience he has been enjoying since he shifted his
lectures
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 online. In summary, I agree that giving
lectures
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 in halls to a large number of
students
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 is outdated, and online tutoring should be embraced because it improves concentration,
minimizes
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minimises
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 distraction, and improves the quality of education.

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structure
Plan your answer with a clear plan. Start with your view, give 2-3 clear reasons, and end with a short finish.
coherence
Use simple linking words to show how your ideas fit together. For example first, also, but, and finally.
examples
Add stronger and clearer examples for each reason. Use real facts or clear details.
strength
Your view is clear from the start.
strength
You use some good links between ideas.
strength
You give real life examples from universities to support points.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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