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Band 6.5

The bar chart show the percentage of household in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011

The bar chart illustrates
amount
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the amount
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money
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of money
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 made from
possessed
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the possession
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 and
rented
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rental of
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accommodation
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annual
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annually
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 in two different cities in the UK, England and Wales, from 1918 to 2011.Units are measured
in
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as
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percentage
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a percentage
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 of
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household
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the household
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.
Overall
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, the rates of rented houses are
higher
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higher,
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reached
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reaching
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 about 80%
than
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to
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 that owned it approximately around 70% throughout the period. The least faced a
fluctuated
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fluctuation
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 in
first
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the first
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 four years
compered
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compared
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 to rented houses decreased slightly until 2011 went up nearly 8%. At the beginning, the
household
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 rented
accommodation
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 in 1918 peaked at less than 80%
while
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,
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apply
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 the
household
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 owned
accommodation
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 began at 22%. In 1939, it went down nearly 68% until
declined
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declining
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 59% in 1961
,
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;
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however
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, the least went up roughly 18% in 1961.
On the other hand
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, both were
stayed
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at 50% in 1971. The
household
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 rented
accommodation
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 climbed up reached about 79% in the
last
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for
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apply
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quarter
years
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apply
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compared to the least fell to about
38
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38%
 throughout the period.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words accommodation, household with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • own, owned
  • rent, renting
  • ownership, rental
  • household, households
  • percentage, share
  • rise, increase, grow
  • fall, decrease, drop
  • go up, go down
  • increase steadily, rise gradually
  • sharp, strong, big
  • gradual, slow
  • significant, considerable
  • stable, steady
  • period, time
  • between, over, during
  • by, in
  • in contrast, while
  • however
  • first, then, finally
  • gap, difference
  • peak, reach
  • drop, fall
  • more, less
  • policy, loan
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