The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. Describe the information presented below. Comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.

The bar graph illustrates how many
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people
unpaid
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work unpaid
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work
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per week in different
catergories
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categories
between married
men
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and married
women
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.
Overall
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,
maried
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married
women
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tent
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tend
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to have more unpaid
work
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hours
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compared to married
men
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in all categories. Meanwhile, married
men
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tend to have
less
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fewer
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unpaid
work
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hours
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if they have more
children
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.
Furthermore
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, males show
the
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apply
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similar unpaid
work
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hours
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over all categories,
while
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women
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vary dramatically. Looking at the graph more closely, married
women
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with 3 or more
children
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reached a peak
around
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of around
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55
hours
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per week.
While
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men
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with 3 or more kids show the lowest unpaid overtime
hours
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: 20
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.
In contrast
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,
in
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apply
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both
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apply
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married males and married
femaleswithout
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females without
children
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have a tendency
that
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apply
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they do unpaid overtime
work
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. Females with 1 or 2
children
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do overtime
work
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without pay for 50
hours
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,
while
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males in the same situation do 35
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less than females: approximately 15
hours
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, work, men, women, children with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unpaid work
  • Household chores
  • Gender roles
  • Disparity
  • Societal expectations
  • Cultural norms
  • Full-time housewives
  • Part-time jobs
  • Traditional responsibilities
  • Domestic roles
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