The graphs below the transport modes in European city between 1960 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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proportion
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of transport categories in a European city from 1960 to 2000.
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, the
car
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use surged the most among
bus
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buses
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,
car
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cars
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,
bike
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and foot over the period.
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foot and bike travellers plummeted dramatically. Meanwhile, travel by bus fluctuated throughout the given period. Looking at the graph more closely, one can see that the use of
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surged significantly by 20% to 25% in
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reached a peak of 35%.
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travellers by foot dropped by 20 percent
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15% in 1980.
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it hit the bottom of 10%. Bike travellers accounted
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least in 2000
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, it took up 25%, which was the second biggest proportion in 1960.
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, travel by bus fluctuated over the given period. It started at 18% in 1960
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and reached its peak at 25%.
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it dropped 16% in 2000.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "surged" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • predominance
  • corresponding decline
  • surge
  • urbanization
  • infrastructure development
  • environmental awareness
  • resurgence
  • primary modes of transport
  • decades
  • shift in transport modes
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