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The line graph shows the percentage of Internet users in three countries from 1999 to 2009 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The line chart illustrates
amount
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the amount
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 of money
spend
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spent
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 on the internet
annual
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annually
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 in three different countries
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: The
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The
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the
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 US,
Canda
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Canada
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 and
Mexico
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 between 1999 to 2009.
Uints
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Units
 are measured in percentage. It’s
a
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apply
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clear that
,
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apply
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The
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the
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 US experienced a significant increase of using internet
while
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,
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while Canada
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Canada
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Canadian
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 users
fluctuated
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fluctuated,
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reached
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reaching
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 a higher point
and
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, and
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Mexico
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 faced a slight
rose
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rise
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in
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at
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 the end of the period. Between 1999 to 2001, the rates of using
internet
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the internet
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 in
The
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the
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 US and
Canada
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 climbed
rapidly
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rapidly,
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reached
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reaching
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 around 35% and the least reached roughly 36%
while
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,
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apply
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Mexico
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 rose slowly about 10%. In the next two years,
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Canada
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Canadian
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 users went up sharply
about
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by about
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 60% compared
to
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while
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 The US
decreased
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users decreased
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dramatically
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dramatically,
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reached at
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reaching
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 45%. From 2005 to 2009, the number of users in
Canada
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 went up until
peaked
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it peaked
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 at 99% compared to
The
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the
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 US
face
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faced
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 a
fluctuated
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fluctuating
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 period
reached
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reaching
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 nearly 77%
,
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;
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however
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,
Mexico
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 increased steadily at 44%
in
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by
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 the end of the period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words mexico, canada with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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