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Writing Samples
Band 1

It is not necessary for people to travel to other places and learn about their culture. We can learn as much as from books, film and television. To what extent do you agree or disagree

In my
opinion
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 it's necessary for people to travel
that
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so that
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 you will be thrilled to bits to
being
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be
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 in the same
place
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 that the topic
in
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.
Altough
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Although
 it's
benefit
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 to learn from books ,
film
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films
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, television
even
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, even
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documantries
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documentaries
it's
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, it's
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 effortless and
saved
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 more money. I think if you can go to places
that
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where
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 their culture you want to
know
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know,
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 go, not just faffing
surround
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around
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 your room and be bewildered. As I mention books, television and
films
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films,
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 it's quite
benfit
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beneficial
and
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, and
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 you must use
it
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them
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 constantly
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, specially
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specially
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 in
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place
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places
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 that you can't go
in for
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to
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 give an idea:
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place
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places
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 that
was
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were
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 in the past it
doesn't
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aren't
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 available right now
or
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hazard
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place
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places
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 that you can't reach easily.
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Occasionally
occasionly
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occasionly,
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 it's abt to
person
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a person
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task response
State your view clearly at the start and keep it clear. Give 2 or 3 reasons with small examples to back them.
coherence cohesion
Make the writing easy to follow. Use one idea per paragraph and link the ideas with short words like and, but, so, then, because.
Task response
The writer takes a real view on travel vs reading.
Coherence
The idea to compare travel with reading and media is seen.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • firsthand experience
  • immersion
  • cultural exchange
  • perspective
  • empathy
  • stereotypes
  • misconceptions
  • theoretical knowledge
  • cultural traditions
  • personal connection
  • emotional engagement
  • language acquisition
  • practical skills
  • real-world situations
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