The graph below shows UK acid rain emissions, measured in millions of tones, from four different sectors between 1990 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates four different
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of acid rain emission in the UK, expressed in millions of
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tones
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from 1990 to 2007.
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, all types of
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experienced different trends in the time period.
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electricity, gas supply, domestic, and other industries declined, the transportation sector rose . Regarding 1990 , the measurement of gas and water supply constituted approximately 3.5
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tones
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and
helt
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held
the highest point .
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this
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statistic declined significantly
to
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1997 and lost 2
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tones
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. From 1997 to
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2003,
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it changed rapidly
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finally
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in
2007
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2007,
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the dimensions of electricity, gas and water supply constituted about 0.5
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tones
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. Notably,
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figure lost 3
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over the time period. Other types of industries started with 2
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tones
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in 1990 and decreased consistently to 2007 , which
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ranged
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between 1 and 1.5
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tones
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. Obviously,
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figure lost half of its measurement.
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However
, transport , communication , and domestic
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beginned
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began
with 0.5
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tones
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in 1990. Both figures changed rapidly.
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transport
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the transport
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and communication
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increased , the domestic sector declined consistently .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sectors, tones with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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