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The chart beiow shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

he
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The
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 column chart illustrates the percentage of
households
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 living in owned and rented
accommodation
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 in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.
Overall
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,
The percentgae
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the percentage
 of
households
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 owning
accommodation
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 increased
dramatic
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,
while
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 the figure of rented
accommodation
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 showed a consistent downward trend over the whole period.
Nonetheless
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, the gap between them shrang again in the
last
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 decade. In 1918 ,rented
accommodation
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 was the dominant choice ,with roughly 77 % of
households
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 living in it.
By contrast
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,
there were
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 only 23 % of
households
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had
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owned
accommdation
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accommodation
.The percentage of
households
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 in the rented
accommodation
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 was more than triple the figure for
households
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 in owned
accommodation
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initially
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 ,but their gap narrowed rapidly over the
fllowing
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following
 decades,and the owning
accommdation
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accommodation
 reached the same level as the rented
accommdation
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accommodation
 at 50% by 1971 From 1971 onwards ,owned
households
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 continued to grow ,peaking at about 69% in 2001
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meanwhile,the rented
accommodation
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 of houses declined to approximately 32%.
However
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,the trend reversed(chaci) slightly in the early 21st century
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The proportion of owned
households
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 dropped a little,at roughly 64% in the
ending
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,
while
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 the rented
accommodation
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 rose to about 35%.In any case ,the
home owner
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homeowners
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 were still more prevalent in England and Wales。

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, accommodation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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