Food travels thousands of miles from producers to consumers.Some people think that it would be better for the envionment and economy if people only ate the local food produced by farmers.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Food
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industry
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has
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globaly
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globally
expanded
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easy air travel from one place to another. Owing to
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, some folks argue that it is better for
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development and
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the environment
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if we do not export
food
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to other
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. I
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partially agree with
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statement. In
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paragraphs
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will
discussed
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how
its is
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it's
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good to use
food
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in local shops. To
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with, nowadays
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advancement
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advancements
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in technology it is easy to export or
import
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the
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apply
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food
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from one place to another
place
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apply
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by air travel.
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, by doing
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this
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this,
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it is very beneficial to
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countries that
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countries
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where
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they
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do not have cultivated land
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, but
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they enjoy all the
food
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by
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import
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from other
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,
thailand
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Thailand
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do not have
their
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much cultivated land to
fulfill
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fulfil
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all the desires of
their
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its
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population
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, and
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they use
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this
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these
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tricks to enjoy
their
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favourite
food
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.
A part
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from
this
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, people can enjoy unseasonal
food
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by importing from other
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, in
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Sri Lanka
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lanka
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lanka,
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they do not have mangoes
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, and
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they enjoy
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delicious fruit by importing from their neighbor
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, india
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india
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India
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and
pakistan
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Pakistan
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.
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, some people argue that it is very costly to
import
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food
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from one
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to another
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due to
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freight charges are too high. Some
beleive
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believe
that the
food
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what
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they
import
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is not fresh and
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comes with more preservatives
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, which
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leads to health issues like
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asthma
and cancer.
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, if they cultivate in their
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country
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country,
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they support their
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and local farmers by purchasing from local markets. It
also
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boost
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boosts
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the
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country
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country's
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economy.
To conclude
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,
by
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apply
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purchasing
food
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from other
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help
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helps
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them
to
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apply
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taste
food
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in any season.
Although
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,
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apply
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by
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apply
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purchasing from local shops
lead
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leads
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to
country
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wealth and
support
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supports
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local farmers.

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task
Make your view clear in the first sentence and stay with it through the essay.
structure
Plan before you write. Use one idea per paragraph and use links to show how ideas go from one to the next.
language
Use simple grammar and spell care. Fix wrong words and names, and choose easy sentences.
content
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coherence
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