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The chart below show the proportion of income spent on different areas by one university, in 2005 and 2015.

The two pie charts describe different percentages of money spent by a single University in 2005 and in 2015. From an
overall
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 view, teaching and research
represents
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represent
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 the higher proportion of income spent in both years. Looking at details,
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
accomodation
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accommodation
 decreased from 16% to 8%, during a
10-years
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10-year
 period. In a similar way, funds for libraries dropped from 10% to 5%, in the same time period.
On the other hand
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, expenses in administration and management increased from 6% to 16%,
such
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 as those about
mantaining
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maintaining
campus
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campus,
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raised
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which rose
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 from 10% to 15%.
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, a small increase from 5% to 8%
,
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apply
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 was seen in the
finantial
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financial
 support for students.
Therefore
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, it can be concluded that among the proportion of income spent in 2005 and 2015, the single university employed most
part
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apply
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of
funds
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the funds
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 in teaching and research,
while
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finantial
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financial
 support was the
less
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least
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 supported area.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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