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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and the two pie charts
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show
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 the money spent by the British
police
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 in 2017 and 2018, taking into account the different sources. From an
overall
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 view, most
part
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of the
police
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budget
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 was spent on salaries, and
national
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the national
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 government was the major source in both years.
Total
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The total
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 amount of
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Police
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the Police
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budget
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 increased from 304.7 to 318.6
millions
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million
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of
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dollars, from 2017 to 2018. In the same way, National government and local taxes increased respectively from 175.5 to 177.8 and from 91.2 to 102.3
millions
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million
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of
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dollars, in the same time period. Other
sourses
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sources
, for
istance
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instance
 grants, represented the minor part of the
budget
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. Looking at the pie charts, money spent on salaries decreased from 75% to 69%.
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, the amount of
budget
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 employed in technologies increased from 8% to 14%,
while
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 the one pertaining
building
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to building
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 and transport was the same (17%). It can be concluded that national government and local taxes are the biggest sources of money for
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police
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the police
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budget
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, and most
part
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apply
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of
this
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 is spent on salaries.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, budget with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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