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Band 4.5

Your local public library wants to make improvements to their services and facilities. In order to get ideas from the public, they have asked library users to send them suggestions in writing. Write a letter to the librarian. In your letter • describe what you like about the library • say what you don’t like

Dear Sir, I am writing to formally provide my insight on the improvement
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 the public library. I have been using your wonderful library
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 the age of five. The library offers a quiet and clean place for everyone. People like to spend their time completing their tasks or reading their favourite books. I really appreciate the access to the public computers, as I do not own a personal computer. I tend to use the computer on a regular basis to complete my
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 or to read other academic articles.
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, there is no deadline for the borrowed books. Which is why, general public is unable to find some books as they are never returned.
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, individuals usually forget to return the book as there are no reminders. I really hope that my feedback could assist you
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 the services
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 and facilities. Many thanks, Prabhjot

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coherence
Split the text into two or three small parts: first what you like, then what you want to fix.
coherence
Add a clear ending line on what you would like the library to do.
grammar
Use simple grammar and short lines. For example, say 'Since I was five' instead of 'from the age of five'.
greeting and closing
Use a proper ending like 'Yours faithfully' or 'Best regards' after 'Dear Sir'.
style
Keep ideas in order: one idea per paragraph, and use words like 'also', 'but', 'so' to link ideas.
tone
Polite tone and thanks.
content
You tell what you like about quiet and clean space.
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You point out a problem with reminders for books.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • suggest
  • recommend
  • propose
  • advise
  • commend
  • commendable
  • improve
  • enhance
  • expand
  • extend
  • benefit
  • accommodate
  • organize
  • community events
  • programs
  • collection
  • e-books
  • digital resources
  • signage
  • workshops
  • classes
  • skills
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