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The table shows the proportion of income spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table compares the
share
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 of revenue which people spent on four categories, namely food,
electronic
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electronics
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 and equipment, music and video in the UK in 1998.
Overall
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, music was the highest
proportion
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 among items,
whereas
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 videos ranked
last
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 among
adults
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 and
women
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. With regard to the food,
women
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 had the highest
proportion
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,
accounted
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accounting
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 for 39%, which was larger than the
share
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 of boys by a staggering margin of 16%, as the former ranked first. Turning to the figure for electronic and equipment, children ranked first at 23%,
while
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 it was larger than boys by
an
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a
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 narrow margin of 5%. The
share
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 of men
as
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is
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 twofold as the figure for
adults
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 and girls, with 10%, 5% and 5%, respectively. In terms of music,
adults
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, men and
women
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 had the same
proportion
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 at 5%,
while
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remaining
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the remaining
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 groups had the highest
share
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 between 39% and 40%, with the latter ranking
last
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.
Finaly
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Finally
, videos had the
most
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highest
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proportion
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 among boys at 18, which was followed by girls at17%.
By contrast
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,
women
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 ranked
last
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 at 0.5%, which was 1/2 and 1/4
as
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of
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 the same as
adults
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 and
men
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men's
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 figures.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words share, proportion, adults, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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