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The two maps elow show the road access to a public library in 2010 and in 2015.

The maps illustrate the changes in
road
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 access to a public
library
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 between 2010 and 2015.
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, it is noticeable that the area to the north of the public
library
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 remained unchanged,
while
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 the southern and eastern
part
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parts
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 of the
library
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 experienced significant improvements, particularly in the construction of public facilities and transportation infrastructure. In 2010,
public
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the public
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library
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 was surrounded by a ring
road
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, which was connected directly to
Crown
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Road
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. On both sides of
this
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road
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 were six bus stops located. To the east of
Crown
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Road
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, there was a
car
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park
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 for both staff and the public
which
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 can be accessed via the ring
road
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. By 2015, all bus stops were demolished and replaced by a bus station situated to the west of
Crown
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Road
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, which was connected to two new roundabouts. One of the roundabouts was located at the junction of the ring
road
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 and
Crown
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Road
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,
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 the other one was on the intersection of
Crown
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Road
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 and Kingsley
Road
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.
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, the original
car
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park
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 was converted into a staff
car
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park
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,
while
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 a new public
car
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park
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 was constructed to the east of the
library
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 and accessed via the ring
road
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, library, crown, car, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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